As
I entered the rink, I can feel the fresh breeze of the cool atmosphere swirling
around my hair as if it was about to whisper in my ears, and the gloss of the
polished surface welcoming the presence of my petite feet. I slowly glided to
the right, then to the left, trying to remain vertically balanced. Tons of
people were at the rink, all with different levels of abilities to skate. One
small, seven-year-old kid skated adorably that I was so fascinated by him, I
gaped at the amazing, flexible tricks he could do. On the right corner of the
rink, I could see ice skate mentors (aka professionals) teaching people of
different ages how to carefully skate. On the left side of the rink, some
lovely love birds, by that I mean couples, were happily ice skating, being all
sweet, creating their own space with full of joy and romance. I was enjoying
decent views of the rink until…
Swoosh, swoosh, swoooooosh. An ignoble guy glided
speedily from behind, showing his “oh so cool” ice skating ability as if it’s
the end of the world. "Whoops, sorry! Didn't mean to make you fall" he said, as he skated across the rink. I nearly fell, and no I didn’t just nearly fell, I tripped, tremendously hard. It hurts. I pacifically got up as if I didn’t
feel pain, and I held on to the metallic poles surrounding the rink whenever I
feel like falling again. Other than getting all terrified by the thought, though,
I was in no doubt, enjoying myself so much. Ah, the smell of ice. That relaxed,
calm, and stress free feeling when you can actually feel the soothing smell of
the ice. No, not the smell of my, his, her, or your feet that can ruin the
thought of how pleasurable it may actually smell like, but the ice. It’s
just…comforting, to me.
Seconds, minutes, an hour passed by. The rink
needs to be cleared, and the surface needs to be smoothened. We were asked to
leave the rink for a short time, while the big, blue-colored Zamboni is going
to clean the ice and make it spotless again. Vroom, vroom, vroom, it cleaned
the whole rink. Before we may enter back in, while the surface was still really
smooth, professional ice skaters danced and glided on the surface. A beautiful,
long-haired lady, impressed me by her elegant presence. Her flamboyant dress
was beamingly sparkling, and her pleasant, dazzling moves were gorgeous. She
twirled across the rink, perfectly jumped as she spins in the middle, and the
spotlight iridescently shined on her. She was, one word: inspirational.
After the whole, exhausting but terrific experience, the day ended pleasantly, and I was satisfied by the fulfilled desire I used to have.
Ice Skating Rink<3
WOW REGINA! This essay is indeed descriptive, as expected from you! I can feel the passion you have towards the rink. I can also feel the nervousness you have when you stepped in and asked for your shoes. The mood is slow but not boring, due to the fact that you described everything perfectly. Flawless! Good grammar and usage, just perfect. Keep up, this is one of the best I've read so far.
ReplyDeleteYou totally reminded me of the feeling I had when I skated after a long period of time. Very well expressed. I don't think i found any grammatical errors till the end. But I did get abit confused somewhere in the middle. Other than that... I loved your essay.
ReplyDeleteWow... seriously. *respect* Well, anucha recommended me to read your essay...and yeah, he didn't disappoint me! Your word usage are so well chosen...like the adjective that you've describe the elegant girl. It makes me feel like I'm in the situation...It makes me feel like, I'm the one who's telling the story xD Well, I don't know. Your writing is perfect and stainless... It feels like I'm reading a novel! :))
ReplyDeletePS. Please give me an advice, master! _/\_
-Vanantorn S.
Absolutely loved it! So precise! Great usage of grammar no mistakes form what i think.. Well, just want to say i felt the whole moment and was on ice skating rink just like you, my face was glued to he screen while reading haha. Well keep up the good job :) Keep wriing..
ReplyDeleteThis. Is. Amazing. I loved how you used word variations and, like what Anucha said, it is very descriptive. Not just descriptive, but very well descriptive. Keep writing and you'll do even better (and I shall keep reading =w=b)
ReplyDeleteI feel sorry for you tripping over. I hope you were okay. :(
And let's iceskate together some time :D
WOWWWWWW!! Regina!!! This is awesome! You are a fantastic writer! Your vocabularies aren’t too hard to understand. Your descriptive really makes me feel like I'm really in the ice rink. This too remind me of when I went to ice skating and how hurt it feels when I fall :( You should tutor me how to write sometimes hahahaha! Keep up! I’m can’t wait to read your next blog ;)
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ReplyDeleteI love your writing, it was awesome. Absolutely amazing! Your writing was perfect like literally perfect. The way you use the words and describe each thing, it was fantastic. I feel like I was there, at your place, holding the rink. I love the way you describe the whole situation and your surroundings especially the part where you described about the guy showing “oh so cool” ice skating ability. Lastly, you did a really good job and I really enjoyed reading it.
ReplyDeleteCatheriya P1
DeleteYou want me to skate again. I didn't skate for so long and I miss it very much. I was and still a beginner in skating. When I first saw those professional skates, they are well-trained. I want to feel the ice like them. I want to fly over the ice like them.
ReplyDeletePhatjanant P.8
Nice! Your essay is easy to understand, yet, is also very descriptive. After reading this, it reminds me the time when I went skating. It's hard and normal for us to fall down, even I do. Your writing is great. I really enjoy reading it and it makes me want to go skating again, hopefully I will not fall down again too.
ReplyDelete- Kanyarak K. (P1)
Reginaaa~ You make me miss the ice skate. Your writing was great. I loved it. Actually I liked to skate and I flow through your writing. You did a great spectator sport. You put it in detailed and I can follow what had you experienced. I also fall when I went there and the professional skaters are gorgeous liked what you have said. Well, done! Good Job! :)
ReplyDeletePantaree P1
It's very nice, Regina! I really feel like skating. I think of the past when I skate before and start to skate again, like you. I like how you explain and express your feelings. It's also one of my experience that I fell, but it's alright!
ReplyDeleteI enjoy reading your essay!
Awwwwwww I REALLY REALLY REALLY like your work here.
ReplyDeleteIt made me miss ice-skating so much.
The thing that you expressed about how cool and comfortable it is to stay on the rink really catches me. I also thought like that too!
But falling down when someone hits you really hurts ;_;
Regina, please reply to your friends comments with educated comments! Hehe!
ReplyDeleteEnjoyed reading. Keep it up!